Tuhituhi: Writing:
This is just some of my creative writing that I have done.BANG! I look outside my window and all of a sudden I see these green weird creatures crawling out of this ufo looking vehicle, so I call out to my parents and say “ THERE'S ZOMBIES OUTSIDE!” They rushed down the stairs and told me to stop being silly but as soon as they looked outside the window they saw more and more zombies crawling out of the ufo like an infinite loop. Without hesitating, my parents got their emergency kit with a few other weapons like an axe and a gun with a few rounds of bullets. They knew if we stayed there any longer the zombies would eventually find a way into our house and destroy it, so we went out the back door and ran to the forest where we hoped no zombies would be.
When we started our adventure we travelled for a few days without food or shelter but as we were walking I could see some smoke rising from a chimney in the distance. I quickly told my parents that I could see some life up ahead, so we started to head in that direction. When we could clearly see the house we went up to the door and tried to peep through to see if it was safe or not. It turns out someone lives there but they were just out trying to find anything they could. When the owner came back home she let us stay but only if we could help her find some material, food and water.
When we got settled into the house and had trust for each other, we all went out looking for supplies. When we were walking, I tripped and fell into a big dark hole in the ground that was about 50ft deep.Luckily I landed on a gigantic,fluffy, Kowhai tree.I stood up and looked around then,I realised I was standing in an overgrown motorway!!
This is a super cool piece of writing. You had me at your very first word and sentence. I am not really into weird crawling creatures, but I wanted to know what was going to happen. I really like the descriptive words that you are using throughout your stroy it add detail and excitment. I like the way that you broke it down into paragraphs. I like your ending of landing ina gigantic fluffy Kowhia Tree.
ReplyDeleteKeep up the awesome writing and thanks for sharing it on your blog.
I love this story Buster! It sounds even better when you're reading it to me.
ReplyDeleteI'm pleased it's only a story as Zombies are NOT my cup of tea.
Just to reassure everyone there are no axe's, guns or bullets in our whare either lol.
Ka pai son.
Māmā xx